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Re: The Camping Trip
It was supposed to be a camping trip. For two weeks we were supposed to be camping, having fun with friends, away from parents with only a teacher to watch ...
Jun 25, 2011 -
Re: I Do?
First off, I would like to commend you on a job well done. This is a really emotional poem and I can feel everything that you're trying to convey; there's ...
Jun 20, 2011 -
Re: The Sun Shall Shine Through
Doxie!!! I swear you have a talent for writing poems. I absolutely adore this one. I just hope she can read this so that she knows there are people who ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: Gummy Worms
First off, I'd like to say that this is a cute poem. I really love the story behind it. Secondly, I'd like to say that the form of your poem ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part
Chapter 11 Troy still had me in his arms; he was still murmuring apologies to me and I realized that we both went through a lot of things while we ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: Booty Shorts
Absolutely loved it!! Seriously, I know what you mean. Great poem!
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part
Well, this is just a part of a whole story that's why you can't understand it. You should read the first few chapters before this one otherwise you really will ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: 'Til Death Do Us Part
Chapter 10 “I-I-I...” Marc trailed off not really knowing what to say. “Troy, please calm down.” I soothed. “Go to the other room and take Rose. I don’t want her ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Childhood Horrors
Wow! I mean, yeah, wow! This is a scarily accurate work. The title is definitely appropriate. I didn't really find anything that was wrong with it grammatically aside from a ...
Jun 6, 2011 -
Re: Pochahontas (spelling fail!)
First off, this is rather cute. Now, onto the comments. My name is pochahontas, -Pocahontas I sing every thing I say . I constantly have drug induced delusions. Like talking ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: Star Dust
Delilah had always liked Manhattan. She remembered her first time visiting in short bursts of clarity; blinding lights against the dark sky, illuminating the night; a rat, with squinty black ...
May 28, 2011 -
Re: Broken: Chapter 1: A friend, an ally, a lover?
It had been four months. Four months since that fateful day and since her heart died. It had been sixteen weeks since she discovered she was pregnant and found out ...
May 28, 2011 -
Re: Vengeance
My heart pounded in my chest as I hid in the hallway closet. I listened to the gunshots, the terrified screams of my friends and family and the commanding shouts ...
May 28, 2011 -
Re: The Essence of Nothing: A Series of Short Poems
WOW!! you're absolutely right!! he is a genius... I absolutely loved it although I was a little disappointed by the lack of punctuations but this is just beautiful. I did ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: The Magic of the Night Sky
This is a beautiful poem. However, I did find some mistakes and would like to point them out. The night sky expands over the world below , Everywhere the stars ...
May 27, 2011
