Yagaron

I'm sorry to dis appoint you, but Raneer is not the main charachter (although he is a major one. Also, if it make you feel better I will get rid ...

By: Yagaron Redson Raneer Lightning rent the sky. Thunder shook the earth so hard it might split. Raneer paced his his cell. He knew something unusual, no, extraordinary was about ...

Hey, Jagster! okay, first, are the rocks just for minerals or do they help break up food? (the teeth would do that). Secondly, it seems a little unclear here: The ...

Climbersquirrel: no, I do NOT have to know what it means! Suzanne: No, I don't even know what it means, but it does not matter. all that does matter to ...

Hey, Ygaron here! Just a few minute details First off, So make a choice and choose it wisely I would advise going with just "choose wisely" instead of "choose it ...

Dushnavslo'v. Alknon Slaveshkl'ovan Deleflechu! Prostroectosht blentruva! Plaskent'ova Lothrosheta eskiroba shlov. Lohrsketiosha! Dushnavsslo'v. Lestos livenshlog! Ovenschnetu Loshtuve!

Spinning, spinning. In endless circles. What's the point? Where does it lead? When you are spinning, spinning, In endless circles. Around again. Spinning. Time stops. Or does it start? Does ...

As Suzanne said, you could describe a little more about this person. Maybe tell us who the are and what relation they are to you (i.e. father, boy/girlfriend, mother, etc.). ...

Please keep within the appropriate boundaries of speech. Some people may find language of that type to be offending. Anyway, just a few things. I'm sorry, but I'm afraid you ...

This is the prologue of the story an is meant to be all mysterious and stuff, but I will make some changes. Thanks for the help!

In the cold, dark alley, a small creature hunched, alone, freezing, soaked to the bone for the the night's cold, cold drizzle, and utterly miserable. it shrank farther back into ...

Lightning rent the pitch blackness of night. Thunder shook the ground so hard it might of split. Harpler paced his cell. There hadn’t been a gale this fierce in nigh ...

Great work, Kyte! Although, as the others said, you may want to organize it a bit. It has no flow. you need to break it up more. You know sentences, ...

Well, it is free verse, but thanks for the tips! I'll try and edit it.

I liked it a lot! However. if you are tho change it (which I agree with Chocoholic on), I think "with someone else" would just flow better. I don't know ...