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Alianne Rai was married to James for five years before they had a child, but not for lack of effort. She had gone to every doctor and feminine specialist. She ...

I'm redoing it a bit, with a better prologue. Will you reread that? Its going to be rather different but the actual chapter one will start the same.

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I'm really interested now! Do you have more posted? :D I noticed one big thing. Rowan goes from noticing there were no open seats to flopping down in one fully ...

This has great potential! I noticed a lot of unnecessary capitals, but other than that it has good grammar, though a few misused words (quenched does not mean squashed. That ...

I felt the need to sing this while I read it. Its just so true! I don't think there is anything that I would change exactly. Perhaps add rhyme? Though ...

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Soooooo.... I wrote this chapter of a novel and now I want to split it up into a prologue and a first chapter. How do I do it? :thud:

This just kind of made my life. Or death now I think of it. O.o Satan and Minos were sat in splendid thrones This one thing bothered me, because it ...

I like this. Its very very sad, but I feel like you captured the essence of his pain. One thing is that I had a hard time visualizing where he ...

Haha well I didn't realize. i wrote to a decent stopping point. XD

This is really good. It speaks to how all highchoolers feel I think. I like the rhyme scheme, and word choice. I think the ending of a better tomorrow is ...

There is no sound in the great dark ballroom, but for the slight swish of elegant evening gowns, the quickened breathing of dancers, and my pounding heart. The black subterranean ...

I definitely do like this. It has a sense of purpose, like it could be one of those songs that has you thinking well after the ipod is put away. ...

This is SO cool! I really really like where youre going with it! One thing you may want to do is vary your sentence structure a bit, but other than ...