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Teen angst/drama is full o f so many topics, yet it is so difficult to write about. Nice job. The little problems that were there have already been stated.

Eeeeeek!! I love these photos. ...they make me feel all warm inside. The true meaning of Autumn.

Really Nice! Mother had been continuously shuffling around the house and talking to herself this whole time, during which she had managed to put a plate of breakfast before me. ...

Lovely, just a few things. The grammar things are in bold. Well, it proba b ly was not the smartest thing to let her go flying after she just grew ...

I L-O-V-E this poem. I myself can't really relate to it, but i have many friends who have faced this time and time again. These are the kind of people ...

Wow... this is deep...I love it.

Nice. You can really see the beauty of it all. Nice work.

oh, thanks. That's good. I just wanted to present this in a non-preachy way. I'm happy.

WOW.. that is all i can say. Beautiful poem. Nice view of our Savior's death, and our new life. Wonderful. You have blessed yet another Jesus freak.Yeah, baby!

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People things Are worth giving up For a nice pair of wings. I was just confused... did you mean People-things , or People,things ? Other than that, very nice. short ...

really nice opening... you can tell a lot about the main character.

B-E-A-utiful use of dialect in the dialogue there. l love the fact that you use 1st person, so that whole "Momma" scene could be possible... really helps the reader actually ...

Really nice... You can really see that Pete is well characterized. Good job. He speaks like a real human being. I know that sounds weird, but if you look at ...

Nice, but the script was short and didn't give us much to go on... It's a little hard to follow since each person speak exactly like the person above them( ...