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Beautiful. Just a few key points. Who is that who wears the red mask to hide her face ? It seems a little redundant when you say " hide her ...

Same here. I felt like all this was going on and I was left at the metro bus stop- on the other side of the street. Nice poem and story, ...

Nice, but just a few things. It seems like you could have added a little more detail or something. Maybe another stanza to let us know why? or how? or ...

Really deep. Just one thing- Simple defiance was all it was, an attempt to fight the impossible ? . Is that what you meant or was it attempt to fight ...

Absolutely beautiful.Wonderful poem.

Whoa, okay, let's try starting with grammar. Here are a few writing tips, first of all... 1. No chat speak.non. whatsoever. Never in Literature. 2. "I" is ALWAYS capitalized. Always. ...

Yeah, same here. It would make a nice chorus for a song...hehehe.

Nice start, but just s few things. First off, let's add a few spaces- He had driven for quite a long time and he knew that if he kept going ...

Wow. Really nice. Short and straight to the point. I can't see anything wrong with it at the moment.

Whoa. Totally different. This one is much nicer. Really Beautiful. Just a few tweaks. I glance upon the shops once more, remembering the life I led within, and walk down ...

I am a little confused as to what you are trying to say... Grammar is in bold. "Lost," I tell myself, " L ost, but can be found again, that's ...

Beautiful Poem. I just made a few suggestions. ( I am not trying to force you into anything) I hear the whispers in my ear, they try to avoid my ...

I love the first one. It is elegant. Really pretty.

I won't go into much detail, because everyone ahead of me pretty much said everything. The ending just seemed like it was stapled onto the rest of the poem. Over ...

Nice. Grammar is in bold . Here I lie again in this dark night the shadows my only friend heart broke n? here I lie again alone in this night ...