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Not bad. :wink: Just a few grammatical errors (in red), and structural errors(in blue). Pagan rituals to compliment the season, to bring about the solstice to give us a reason. ...

One Reason Why People Aren’t Better Than People. 1) Really? I mean, really? Has it all come down to this? Taking sides of gender or whatever? This is ridiculous—I hope ...

Really refreshing poem.Not all about gloomy and depressing love. i like it. Just one or two things. Summertime, she says to me: We skip away to drip ice cream on ...

It's pretty in ffrench, but in english it just seems a bit plain. really nice, though. 7/10

5 Reasons why people who don't make "5 Reasons why somethingsomething are better than everyone else" threads are better than everyone else. Nate's idea. But I wanna do one. The ...

What if the parent told the child "No, don't touch that, it will hurt", and when the child continues to reach for the object, the parent allows them to burn ...

I have to commend you. For you did something that most people try to avoid. You used second person. ( You blank blank, then you blank blank) Very bold, and ...

Again, you have got the goods , baby. great job! ------------------------ -jojo.

You are really good for a "beginner". I especially love the 3rd one. good job. You should be a paparazzi or something. ---------------------------------- -jojo.

Everyone and by everyone i mean everyone who recognizes the difference between races is racist. Simply because they recognize the difference in race makes you racist. Simple fact. Everyone makes ...

What about the adults? There doesn't seem to be much opposition to the idea that violence isn't a good way to solve problems, so what justifies adults doing just that? ...

Hello! and welcome to YWS. Just a few suggestions. I tell him I want to die He says please don't cry I say why shouldn't I? There's no hope left ...

Whoa. this is actually quite interesting. grammar is in red . I am just confused about a few things. I stood in the middle of the storm, wind whipping the ...

I feel it. The eyes of society watching my every move. Even when I'm alone, the pressure haunts me. They follow me. No matter where I am or what I'm ...

JOJO at what point is it justified? Either caning or spanking, I can't see it. I can understand the expediency and short-term benefits easily enough, but all it teaches children ...