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Hello! The night is quiet, or so it seems. But I know better, than to trust my dreams. I like this first stanza very much, it does a great job ...

I was traveling threw a happy land, I think you mean through? listening to my favorite band. But I looked down and saw the sand, looking all dark and tanned. ...

Hello StoryWeaver13, first of all you have a very nice writing style, everything flowed rather nicely and if I do say so this is a wondrous first attempt. The imagery ...

Pat Buchanan lol...

Thank you very much. Yes it helped quit a bit, I appreciate your effort and time. ^^

Void. ;p

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void.

Hi there! First off, I hope I don’t come off to mean. As i walked to the one I loved. All covered in blood. I cried in fear. But where ...

Hello! First of all, I like this and think its great for your age, I only a have a few nick picks I’d like to point out. ^^ Knowledge is ...

Hello! First off, let me say that I really like this piece and enjoyed it very much. Great job. Lost somewhere inside herself, She just can't be found, And it's ...

Hello! I hope I don’t come as too harsh. First of all, your title is what caught me. It isn’t written correctly. More Lust Then Greed. It should be “More ...

Thanks to everyone who commented. I appreciate it. ^^

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Is it that bad? uhhh... PLEASE HELP.