Xena

yea well... good luck to you too, cause i hope nate doesnt bann you!.... which they said they would. ok im kidding i didnt tell on you gys.. which i ...

First off of what i ws told thaqt you rar enot suposed to judtge the actual work but only the grammar.. and im not sure any of you, sorsha, or ...

salsa dancer... you are in my head.... you knwowht i ws thinkging? are you a psycic... Witch>???? you kwno whgy? beaues.. ill tell you why.. i think when posted the ...

ok first of all... sarsha, youre a moron... no lol jk!... no its a good story.. the opening paragraph though, might be a little too much. like, your saying a ...

dont listne to yatta ay... listen to me!!! "Seth shook his bandmate, finally deciding to just slap him a couple times with the pillow, safely tucked in a green and ...

not bad, not bad i guess... the whole creepy guy in the window IS pretty creepy... but i think she would of been alot safer in the club with all ...

humm i guess it was pretty good,, so far. well, actually I just pretty much liekd the ending... the only thing i can see that gives sparkle any personality really ...

hmmm... huhmmmmm.. hmm manchester england, 1831 was it? hmm i think this sounded more like, liverpool, 1903. I dont think they used "cool" as a state of being... knwo what ...

danke people.. and yea, you bonked it on the head ashlylaya. i really wasnt gonna do anything else with this, but ill probably put something together, with allthe editing tips ...

hmmm so it TWAS you who killled princess dianna!! and while listening to billy joel no less! im reporting you. no jk lol.. or am i.

sella.. i cant deny it.. the characters may.. just maaayybe be a bit flat and underdeveloped.. so. im afraid im gonna have to add like alot more chapters. whatever it ...

i havent given much editing thought to this.. why? becaue i thoguht you guys aoculd do that. so. read it. and like, make it better, poitn out errors and stuff... ...

it was pretty good to me other than getting confused. crusty bits on his cheek was cool part. but it would of been better if it was.. unindigestiable peices.. but ...

and dont you ever think i assume that something is funny all the time just fo rthe sake of funny. these are not random things you... they are vital to ...

i get the feeling that you get that feeling. and i cant help but see why. but i dont see anything random with a pink skunk on a ship... no ...