Xena

So im not sure if iguet it... is this like in the future where everybody has to take pills and stuff... but hey... I noticed the ones that had come ...

hmmm... a couple things... the begginning line, i can taste your smell, i thought i was gonna be reading about one of your acid trips and or flashbacks... were you? ...

the structure or whatever wasnt bad... but i dont think the feel or the message was there... you know... cuz like what i got was basically your asking if you ...

did you write this for a class? any hoosier, i liked it... except for maybe the end, where you said its screams loudened... unless you ment it to be like ...

holy moly... huh.. the first thing that struck me was you used alot of 'though's... so my suggestion is... cut down on the thoughs... fur sure! though, of what i ...

hmmm i enjoy many parts and expressions in this story... except It swallowed up the stars and heaven like a fat, white man. now i love the fat white man ...

hello ellen! So vividly can I remember the day we had met. I dont like this line... consider changing to something better... lol i can just imagine her bunched up, ...

“Look at yourself.” He said. And she did just that. She gasped at her reflection. She touched her face and stared into her own eyes, a brilliant red from being ...

Hello im xena and ill be your review for the day! :smt038 Pain punched into his lungs as he sucked in air through burnt his throat, bruising his insides i ...

ahh... both of your reviews/comments are vital to me... i thank you and andy for giving pointers wich i will most likelty change and review... as for that vulgary quote... ...

Give feedback now please... dont even bother with the story... and dont be afraid to tell me how much you love it/me..! A girl looking no older than sixteen lay ...

1. the beginning... the descriptions get pretty elaborate... not nescessarliy a bad thing, except here its hard to follow and picture and stuff... glistening black meadows rolling across planes farthe

well i liked it... some parts more then others... the end specifically was best i think... and i dont think hes satiring anything... are you? its just stupidly bad and ...

heyy i liked this.. i think... well i liked the beginning... well was that like a dream? or was that real? would have been cool if it was real... butta... ...

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