Wolferion

This piece of work feels pretty odd to be honest. I recommend writing poems in more than two verses a stanza =S I feel really odd reading this, it just ...

The idea of it slowly getting simpler and simpler is a pretty interesting one, I do like the poem and I do not think there's something I could point out. ...

Kamas, you've stolen everything there's to say >:0 I agree with Kamas about it being too repetitive. As I myself learned, long verses are pretty much counter-productive. Your poem does ...

Hiya! Well, let's start with what caught my eye at the poem first. I think that your trapt should be trapped . Next thing that I noticed is that you ...

Hiya! I'm Kyo and I'll review this today. Now, I believe you used free verses... There's no proper rhyming. Also, I recommend using punctuations in the poetry, so the reader ...

Edited =) I think it should be a little bit less confusing now ( In more accurate meaning, it shall limit the variety of questions that appear ), also I've ...

Many thanks to both of you =) I believe I've corrected the dialogue mistakes, I hope all of them. Also I've changed many of the ... to - in the ...

Grammar? Darn, I checked it two times and found no mistakes... I guess my FCE level of English ain't enough yet >:0 . Thanks a lot for sharing your experience, ...

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I did expect people to get bored over my scenario anyway, so no harsh feeling ^^ I'm still trying to get that "show more than tell" and "keep it interesting" ...

Hiya everybody! After a long time I'm going to finally post a chapter 1 to the prologue of Two Souls. This is a collaborative work, so do not be surprised ...

Thanks to the LezeleanWitch's help, the prologue final fix is done and posted :) ( I edited whole first post by the newer version ). Now I believe I need ...

I gave you a gold star for this, there's no need for me to review anything =) Amazing piece of work, keep writing!

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I live in Czech Republic =) I was born in Kazakhstan. I hate Kazakhstan though, I'm happy we moved to other country when I was still a small kid.