Wolferion

Also, "counter-attacking" unpaid volunteers who take time out of their busy lives solely to help you is a little ungrateful. Yea you got that right, now that I've calmed down ...

Hiya! As this is a short story and a good one on top of that, I shamefully do not have much to say. While I was reading I came across ...

My apologies, snapped out of control.

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Edited ^^ I thought of using a bit script style for dialogues as in chapter 1 it's a lot of dialogues as I hadn't come up with anything else while ...

Hiya everybody! I've finally written a chapter 1 to the prologue =) I think there's a difference in how I write in 1st chapter, but I honestly hope it's alright. ...

I'll check that book one time :) I've fixed what was mentioned, except the Kyou appearing all of a sudden ( special reasons, will be explained in the first chapter ...

Thanks a lot for your opinion tRiCk. I've rewritten the prologue, giving a lot of new information, widening the sentences a bit and even scoped a bit at the three ...

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Hiya! So let's get on with the review, shall we? :) I'll go with the flow of the story first. 1) I think that mentioning her name before or mentioning ...

Many thanks to the both of you :) I've tried editing the prologue by changing many sentences so they make more sense and aren't that awkward, I believe :D If ...

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I'll go and admit I agree with some of the points winie made. If you erased the "We were on the beach" and simply went on with second verse as ...

I see there's another poem from you LiteHawk =) This one feels less grand then the one about loosing sense to write though. I'll explain. I want to change the ...

Hiya! Alright, let's start with the critique first and then the opinion =) I do not know if you tried to have it rhyme, I can't any kind of a ...