Wiggy

On the ship we had oaten cakes baked three times over. They were so hard that we had to soak them in water before we could even bite into them! ...

Yes. 'Tis hard to be the only one to leave for America without my family, but Pa and Ma need me to and the rest of my family is depending ...

I would think it would blister...

Hehehe... methinks Wiggy has a crush on you. XD I'm Snoink. Um... welcome! We'll do our best to encourage you. And stuff! :) Methinks Snoink is hiding her true feelings ...

This'll take awhile to crit-I'll definitely get to it either tomorrow or Thurs. Looks good! Wiggy ;)

Thanks rose! I appreciate all of your crits-you guys are sooo sweet! *huggles all who critted* Wiggy ;)

Strong, wealthy, and ruled by a pair seemingly blessed by the gods In this sentence, this seemed like a fragment. Maybe word it a little differently. Merchants from far and ...

sleep noon salt virus age _________ The next day I sleep till noon Is the day I will play a bassoon And the salt and pepper shakers Will be captains ...

Yikes, I used to take it...bad memories lol. I now take Russian, so if anyone needs help on that, pm me or Imp, the ultmate Russian master! :D

That's what I call hilarious...hey, who ever said you can't be smart when you're young? :P

Welp, everything's been stated before I could crit-again! My favorite was the plot twist, although I am sad for the girl. :( But the only thing I noticed was that ...

Prolly, Imp. :D Thanks. Gotta love that deep, deep thinking, eh Imp? ;)

I'm a story writer!!!! *raises hand*

Snoinkus- that is funny. I might have to try it! *grins* Cal-Awesome advice! I used to have the exact same problem. But then I realized that 10 adjectives for "flower" ...

I've always had a hard time with dialogue, too. I'm always afraid that my dialogue sounds stilted and that no one will want to read it. Description I'm pretty cool ...