Whisper91

Although "sucked" is (possibly) grammatically correct in the. . . seventh paragraph (oh, you should do something about the paragraph setup), I believe you change it to "suck." You should ...

I have nothing to say. It's beautiful, touching, sweet. You've excellently (as far as I know) depicted this sad plight of many American families. Thank you.

Watch the braces: “All things came to be through him, and without him nothing came to be. What came to be through him was life. . . .” (John 1:3) ...

Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 9, "Pawn": Returnert had still not been disposed of. The conference with the Dark One had gone well, but Returnert felt ...

Watch the braces: Dante sat on his cot in the cell, doodling in the notebook. He drew whatever came to his mind. His first picture had been one of him ...

Watch the braces: After Dante was safely in jail, the cop g{a}ve him two things{: a} black, felt-tipped marker and a notebook. “It’s for a journal,” the cop said{,} “I ...

Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 8, "No Failures": The people of Lydighet's village were in bondage, having been taken down into the plains surrounding the Dark ...

Watch the braces: The police caught the young man, after about an hour-long chase, and brought him into a small building that smelled like eggs. The man hated the smell ...

Comments, edits, added material – it's all in braces. The young man pulled {the item} out the box. He had run away from Conscilia, and he was almost out of ...

Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 7, "Welcome!": Far to the southwest near where the lands are broken the Gulf of Hammer, the people of Lydighet's village ...

Watch the braces: {S}he drifted off to sleep. When she {a}woke the next morning, {Sequoya} found herself in her own bed. Confused, she sat up quickly, almost knocking off the ...

Watch the braces: As the day wore on, Sequoyah quietly s{a}ng to herself, going about her daily chores. Slowly she knelt down on her knees to fill {a} bucket, letting ...

Of the Lands of Ray and Hammer , Segment 6, "Departure": The next morning, Lydighet awoke earlier than usual. It would be around three hours before sunrise. The boy had ...

Remarks and add-ins are in braces: {On the date spoken of, t}he most important city in the United States of America was Conscilia, Texas. It was on the west side ...

Remarks and add-ins are in braces. I didn't read others' reviews so I might be repeating someone. “Dark or milk?” the receptionist at {“}The Center of Chocolate{”} asked the young, ...