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Athletes race to win. Some have ill motives, some have honorable motives, but they all share one mentality: “I compete.” In their competing, they become stronger and healthier. As the ...

"She had always supposed that she only had so many chances, so many times that she could cheat death, and they had to be used up by now"--I added a ...

I just removed "method" from in-between (ha-ha, another example of my "issue") "former" and "tramples" in the last sentence. Whether using "cannot" in place of "can not" is proper or ...

This is assignment number seven of chapter two from The Lively Art of Writing by Lucile Vaughan Payne. This is merely the assignment and does not necessarily represent the opinion ...

I only went through the first two paragraphs. My additions, comments, and any other miscellaneous jots and scribbles are enclosed with braces ({}). You may notice that words have been ...

I only read your post, so you might find my remarks repetitious. Remarks are in braces ({}): The crosshairs fixed themselves upon the middle of the obscure figure's head. The ...

The United States has conducted five wars: the War of 1812, the Mexican-American War, the Spanish-American War, World War I, and World War II. Each of these conflicts ensued after ...

Just to let you know, I don't read other peoples reviews or critiques. I only read the original and then critique. All of my input, comments, corrections, etc are in ...

This came to me in like an hour some week and a half ago. I'm probably not going to tweak it because I'd like to preserve it just as it ...

Re-work the second sentence. Its length and grammar both need help. Don't start sentences with "then" so much. The pin and five miles thing is a little. . . extreme. ...

"Walk a mile in each other shoes?" - Is that really the phrase? It doesn't even sound like proper English. Redo the second sentence. Would most really want to be ...

Instead of "those that," I'd say (well, I'd write) "those words." You're priorities quite acceptable. I'd have to say that the "being true to yourself" stuff sounds. . . cliche ...

My heart's pounding. I don't know how you do it. It's amazing. I want to cry, but I will not. Bitterness of death without hope - it's sad. It doesn't ...

OK, strange in a way. A little. . . unrealistic. Maybe not. I haven't experienced it (and I pray I won't for years to come). It's well written, but the ...

I would change the "No; it has to be you" part into the "No, it has to be you" part (semicolon to comma). It's encouraging to see (from my point ...