Whatsarahsaid

A cute poem. Perhaps you could experiment with more complex verses and vocabulary. You have a nice style, but that's what I think you should do to develop as a ...

The first stanza was mediocre but you caught me on the second, such simple imagery really beautifully written. If I had the same images in my mind, I wouldn't be ...

You shouldn't really need to explain the poem, a habit I know I do it myself. It was beautiful, hands are very expressive. Agreeing with PsyLynx, the impression of falling ...

The rhyming part is very simple, but effective. I like the way complex verses were balanced with such a simple rhyming scheme. Nice imagery too.

I loved it, the language is so sharp and coarse. I'm not sure I understood it, I did try! "and why the cage? pride binds my words fast, .....and silences ...

I like this, its different. I think it should be under alternative poetry. Very simple, but is full of imagery. I like the repitition.

That's really nice, I like the tone. Where you doing Mischa Barton or Marissa? You've captured Marissa perfectly, she's got the real little lost girl look, in the eyes.

I don't understand this! Some people are saying Emo is heavy metal and some are saying it's bands like Deathcab! I think music is however you see it, no one ...

I liked this, but it was too long and very obvious how it was going to end. If you wanted to shock the reader in a climax, you should shorten ...

Well actually, I'm sure I'm breaking a rule or too.....

Thank you again Snoink, and many thanks to Hope as well. I actually cringe when I read this now., all those grammatical errors! Well anyway, my first attempt of a ...

Amazing. I can scarcely type, this is the best thing I have read in sometime. You are everthing I could hope to be... Love your style. "he kissed her with ...

This will be nowhere near the best post on this board, but I've tried and this is my first attempt. Sorry about grammar! It's been a long time I've wrote ...

Factory farming is a myth. There's no such thing. Not giving animals room to move prevents them from growing, and reduces the meat yeild. Thusly reducing the ammount of money ...

Thanks people! It's due in around 3 weeks time