WhatIsWhy

I love this story so far! I can't wait to see what the Princess is like. However, there are two things the others missed: dignitaries, prince's and great knights "prince's" ...

Very nice! :D The only thing I'm not sure of is whether Ray is a boy or a girl. You might want to clear that up. Also, the transition from ...

D: Leaving real soon. I'll posty whatever chapters I get done in the next 2 days on saturday :D

mm I see what you mean about those sentences. editing ahoy!

Chapter Two There was only one hitch in the plan, it seemed, as the three headed out from the castle on horseback. They didn’t know what kind of creature had ...

:D thanks! actually, I think I'll try to finish chapter 2 NOW before my grandparents get here. I can do it. I know I can.

You're welcome! ^^

Kay, here I go! First story post :D This is a very light, soon-to-be-silly stereotypical fantasy type thing. Sometimes I like to write stuff that's amusing rather than serious, and ...

Very intriguing. Made me want to know who the Master is and what he's going to do with Bracken, besides how he became "the Master" in the first place. He ...

Very engaging beginning. Makes you want to know who he is exactly. I agree with Adam--you should make the first paragraph less repetative with your use of "the master." "He" ...

dude, that's cool! I like the fighter, too.

'Lo everyone... ...I always feel a little shy about these introduction things, but I thought I'd give it a shot this time. :D Alrighty, so m'name's Shawnee, but somehow I've ...

Your imagery, especially of the creatures that take Fred, is very good, and you should continue with that as it is. :D I definitely want to know why they took ...