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Wow, that kept me gripped from beginning to end. The paragraph on the nature of humanity seemed a bit out of place. Thought trails like that can lead your reader ...

DO NOT CRITIQUE! :) This poem is being rewritten right now, so a critique wouldn't really help at all. If you really feel the desperate inceasent need to critique, leave ...

*Yeh I was thinking he heard something going on, followed the noise and found the group of muddy people. Is that alright? There was the big explosion thing, then Threnody ...

Cody walked steadily through the trees, taking care not to stand on any small creatures that might be in his path. He'd heard a load of noise from this direction, ...

*Thanks for the sum up Billy* Benji looked down at the ground that was steadily getting further away. 'Can we fly like this?' He asked, making an attempt to swim ...

Ello. First things first - I like how you've noted what your inspiration was, it's interesting, but the three paragraphs of information at the beginning is kind of offputting. You ...

Wow. To be honest when I read 'I am Bob. I am Bob. My name is Bob,' I expected to be giving a pitty-critique, but this is awesome. I think ...

You only joined today? Haha, I like this one, though I feel slightly guilty about giving a critique... There's two issues though. You've posted three pieces of work in one ...

Ello :) Right... fun time. Why is 'Designated Driver' Quoted? Is it supposed to be? 'Dez, Trina, Kyle... always taken them there.' Info dump. If that's a crucial part of ...

Owe, I wanna hug him! This is an amazing piece. Good points first. Even though it's really long, your variety of punctuation, and sentence and paragragh lengths, did really well ...

Benji climbed to his feet and squinted at the hole in the ground that wasn't there two seconds ago. Half of his clothes where burnt, his skin covered in black ...

name - Benji age - 15, kind of gender - Male race - Other appearance - He's small, got fluffy black hair, dark blue eyes, looks really girly and dresses ...

I've never heard of a Cherub... But this sounds like fun. Can I stick my character in there, and you guys puppet him around until I get the jist of ...

Ello :) First things first: You've posted two pieces of work, but no reviews. That means you owe four. You should put the plagiarism note at the bottom too, those ...

Ello I have to agree that this is a pretty good poem, even though it's a little short. I admire your courage to ask people to tear your poem to ...