WaywardBird

Hehe, I liked this poem a lot! And I totally agree with you on the 'serious yws writers' thing, it's very refreshing to have a fun nonsense poem once in ...

Not bad, not bad at all. The wings on the left, the right wing seems to extend too much to the left, and the beak curvature is a little off. ...

I really like this 'paragraph'. I think it really put into perspective the whole 'forbidden fruit' thing, because Eve's situation was just like that, temptation for a thing you wanted ...

Thanks! That stuff made a whole lot more sense and sounds a lot better! :)

Haha! This was a very funny entry to me, a bit like a Saki piece. You had me till the very end, and I enjoyed every minute of it! Hehehe, ...

I liked the poem's theme and the words used, but they seem a tad long. Perhaps if they were simply cut in half because I can't tell when it's supposed ...

Oh wow oh wow wow oh wow..... That... Has to be... one of the best short stories... ever..... ¡¡¡¡¡ EVER !!!!!! I loved it! I'm gunna keep it if you ...

***Attention, this is a story I do not plan to finish, but need feedback on for assignment purposes. This prologue is designed to draw the reader in and make him/her ...

I agree, you need something more along the story or moral line... But other than that, I kind of liked it. It was like, the drunk on the bus that ...

I liked this poem a lot; a solid seven out of ten, it's just the ending that seemed a little warbled. Perhaps a syllable is missing from the ending, but ...

SoggyPoptart thank you! Oh, I'm blushing, :D

To Lacey Thank you so much for the 'Ripping' (Lol,), I appreciate the hints and they do seem to make much more sense. I'll make the changes in the poem, ...

Sorry it's taken me to reply! But to ¡CaptainRandom! Thanks and I get where you're coming from with the 'liked it but didn't know why' thing, and I think it's ...

I think if you're talking about the devil in "He is satin in every form," It's spelt Satan. But, of course wherever you are it might be spelt Satin. Other ...

So, here's my second poem posted on here, hope it's good but you never can tell. At least, I don't think you should trust the writer who can tell. Editors, ...