WaterVyper

Yes, this will be my first poem. I have a little problem with the structure in the first verse, because the fourth line is too short. I can't think of ...

Hi and welcome to YWS! The community here is great and people are always willing to help. Have a great time here, and I hope to see some of your ...

One of those old, abandoned and lonely sort of warehouses. You need a comma after the word 'abandoned'. At the moment , Ah, no spaces before a comma. what if ...

I usually just write a couple of lines in a few minutes, leave it, then get back to it later for a couple of minutes again. That technique works very ...

This is a nice poem, made me think of my three best friends. The emotions are conveyed quite nicely in this, so I have no problem with that. Now, time ...

“Hello,” you say. I don’t look up. I just keep staring at the book my hands, the small, leather bound volume. You frown and try again. “Hello?” Your voice is ...

People bustled from one place to the next – hardly noticing if one bumped into someone or even a hurried apology was spoken. The last part sounded strange. Perhaps you ...

Hot and sticky I opened my eyes That would be better if you put a comma after the word 'sticky'. You seem to have a slight problem with punctuation. The ...

Everyday, I write a letter. I grab a sheet of paper, white and crisp. As I grasp it, I can see a crease appear, marring the blank surface. The wind ...

This is cute. The Konoha symbol there makes me think it's one of Kakashi's nin-dogs, even if his dogs have the blue jacket/coat/thing. The flames look a little awkward, though. ...

I loved these. They were really cool. I don't see much snow/ice at all, unless I go out of the country. Even then, I mostly go to the places where ...

This looks amazing! I could never hope to draw this well in my entire life! However, the eye of the head on the left looks a little bit strange. It ...

I've been using the shift key for as long as I can remember. I just do it automatically. It's kind of weird using the Caps Lock key, but I guess ...

I love the Darren Shan Saga! I have all of the books and in my opinion, the sixth book was best. 'Vampire Prince' was that one. The trial, betrayal, beautiful. ...

Dear WaterVyper, What exactly were you thinking when you put me on the same mission as Auke and Ikemu?! I don't mind Resedia that much, but why? You know full ...