WalrusGumboot

I'm being general here, I don't have much time to write a really long review, but great job! I can spot very little here that's wrong at all. I really ...

First off, let me just say that I think this is really great, good premise, and the characters you've got have the potential to become very well developed. Nice work. ...

I like this one. Normally I don't go for stories like this with clichés, but you pulled it off nicely. Again like the above poster said there are a bunch ...

Hi! I liked it, it was nice and vivid, but maybe it wasn't the best thing for you to put first. A good thing to start a story with is ...