WaitingForLife

Alllllrighty then, Life here to review. ^^ My first off impression was: wow, original names. Big bonus for that. Stories set in fantasy worlds with characters called Jim and Bob ...

This was a very interesting piece to read. I mean, I wasn't really sure what it was about till the end actually, but while I was scratching my head, I ...

Thanks for the advice. :) When I started writing this, I had no idea what the structure of a poem was supposed to be, so no wonder some lines are ...

[WARNING: Contains very strong language, therefore the 18+ rating] Continuation of Part 3 The men were forming up again with an air that spoke of a state of shock so ...

Heya, This brought me a chuckle, which is always fun. The nit-picks have already been taken care of, so I won't bother saying them again. ^^ Nice, little work, with ...

Heya, I really, really liked this. The emotions were there clearly, without the need of extravagant descriptions; it was nice and raw. Your wording was good and the overall flow ...

Impressive, I must say. ^^ I'm looking forward to seeing your works here. I thought that forges would cost a lot more, like in the thousands, though I'm not saying ...

Hey Blade, Big knives are always cool and this is no exception. It seems sturdy enough to handle extreme abuse as you said, and the shape is great, curvy yet ...

Hey, Life here to review! :) You had a really good idea here, it's too bad that the presentation of it could have been better. Your wording was pretty good, ...

This piece had a very nice flow to it and I never expected the ending, which made it all the better once I reached it. This was a great idea, ...

When I read this I literally stopped breathing for a moment.:D The emotions in this piece are raw and powerful, subtley weaved among the words. It brought along a large ...

Heya, This was an interesting piece of poetry. Well written, no doubt, and had a lot of emotion in it. For the most part, it seemed bitter with a flavour ...

Heya, this is very nicely worded, and is an original idea. The flow is okay, but it sort of breaks up in my head at some points. I'll leave that ...

I agree with Dragonlady on this one. This is a good start, but you should go deeper. Give us more descriptions with which we can make the emotions really awaken ...

Heya skermitz! :) I personally can't distinguish a poem from a slab of butter, but I can tell when one sounds good. This one did. You didn't have that much ...