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Re: New and Lost
hi and welocme to yws, i am rather new i still am figuring out my way but so far i'm enjoying it :) :smt020
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Fear
Fear, a horrible thing. Just the feeling of it stings. Haunting thoughts linger, Attempts to forget are hindered. THIS IS AWESOME but the last part doesnt flow, it rymes just ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Maybe...
Maybe it’s time for me to let go, Take a step, Trust my own feet, And believe that You’ll catch me if I fall. Maybe I need to forget what ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: A Note to the World: We Will Rise.
Don't ever say never. Hope is forever. Let the river sweep past, all wide and vast, in the morning sun, rising on a reprieve and misery dies on a new ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Modest...not so much
That is spectacular! It speaks to you. Am truly happy to be able to comment on such amazing work! Your poetry rocks! Keep up the good work!
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
This is very good! i see no pont in telling you any constructive critisam when there is none needed! your wroks are perfect! thums up! i like travises perspective on ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Airbag
Thats intence! you dont have any grammer problems so thumbs up on that perspective. I try to help writers inprove but there is no constructive critisisam needed here you poem ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: unspoken
From the words of a monster I hate you, From the eyes of a winner who makes it through. From the person you love I wish you where never born, ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: You Don't
It is very good! The only problem is grammer. But it flows together very fluently and is amazing work! I think you have talent. Try writitng your works onto microsoft ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: ghost
That is an amazing poem, it tells a story and keeps you interested. I am trully facinated with it! There is only one specific problem in which you share with ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Handcuffs
That was amazing work! It is dramatic, intence, the only problem i have found is rhyme. Dont get me wrong it is very good just doesnt completly fit together. But ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: I'm a newbie
Welcome! i'm new too and i'm enjoying it here :smt001
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: Love Story
aww so cute! and awseome grammer i love it!
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: A Pretty Monster
Exceptional work! it shows deep emotion within words, it tells a story and it captures you! This is amazing work! i only wish that i could write as good as ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: my life be like a theme park
this is good! It defenitly caught my atention, It's funny! the grammer was well as well as spelling. if i where a teacher i would give you a+
Jul 17, 2011