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I thought that was very creative. When I first started reading it, I thought that the master had died, so I am glad that you kept him alive!My only suggestion ...

Ahhh!!! I thought quickly as the numbers sounded. I looked around quickly, not seeing anywhere hidden enough. Where to hide? My eyes flew to the house. No, too obvious. Maybe ...

Okay, I've only done this once, so tell me if I am doing anything wrong. Full Name: Serenity Lake Age (18 or under): 17 Appearance (Written and/or Picture): Serenity is ...

Sorry I haven't replied yet, I was on vacation without internet. Charlotte Noble Resistance News spread quickly through the resistance. It hit me hard. "What are we going to do?" ...

That was really good! You had very few grammer mistakes, and the plot was amazing. I loved how you described her nightmare with so much detail and imagery. I really ...

Okay, so I wrote this to be like a folktale/ Native spiritual story, so I know it isn't the best description, but that is kinda the point. I would still ...

Wow, that was really good! I'm religious, and I think that you got the concept right on! I was not expecting you to turn it to Christ in the end, ...

That was really good! I loved the last two lines, they tied it together. Really great job!

Wow! That was really good! I agree with the person above about the stanzas, but other than that, it was great!

I like it! You were right, it is sad, but it is really good. I think that my only suggestion would be to add more of her emotions. It seemed ...

Name: Charlotte Noble Gender: Female Age: 17 Appearance: Short and thin, body built for speed, not strength. Raggedly- cut brown hair with brownish-red highlights that is kept in a ponytail. ...

Wow, that is really good. Really, really sad though. I was hoping for a happy ending. It's good though!

Wow! That is really good! I love how much detail you put in it! It made it really easy to imagine. (By the way, I love the characterization! I have ...

Ok, so this is the first two chapters of my book. I still am not cetain of the title, so any suggestions would be greatly appreciated! Chapter 1 Morning sunlight ...

Wow! This is a really good idea! I have never thought about an imaginary friend world! It's a good start, and the only suggestion I have for you is to ...