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Re: The World is Turning Red
I thought this poem was really good! I liked how you talked about each red thing. It seemed like a poem you would find in your English text-book about descripive ...
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: Broken Promises
That is pretty good! I loved it! And it is so true... I thought you wrote it pretty well. Even though you said it wasn't all that great, I enjoyed ...
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Re: Free Anguish
Okay, so I just have this part of the story, and I would love to turn it into a novel, but I don't have the storyline yet, so tell me ...
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: Canon pairings
Zuko and Katara from Avatar: the Last Airbender should have ended up together. And I agree that Bella should end up with a brick. :)
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: Rejected
Wow, this is really good. I love how you can feel the emotions. You did a really good job showing how the character feels. I love the rythme too. It ...
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: The Blazen Chapter #1
Really good! Just a few things! ~‘Why does Steven think writing down everything was so important?’~ That was, right there, should be changed to "is". ~and if I write down ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Four Poems
Did you write these all today? Because they are really good! (My favorite is the first one.) I didn't see any grammer errors, so good job. The ideas of them ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Caylee
That was really good! I loved the last line being a cliffhanger. Great writing! I didn't see any grammer errors or anything like that, so good job there. The idea ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: Masked Resistance vs Aradian Tyranny {closed/started}
Jasmine nodded, lost in thought. I laughed once, amused by her concentration. "Hey, I'm going to go tell Merry that we are back," I said, turning towards Merry's office. Jasmine ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: War
I really liked this poem. The metephors were really good, and I loved how the rhyme wasn't forced; it made it easier to read and get in to. I loved ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Masked Resistance vs Aradian Tyranny {closed/started}
Charlotte "I'm fine. I guess it was just luck that got me out of there, nothing else." I smiled forcefully. There was something wrong. No, not wrong, different. There was ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Story in Six Words
Good idea! My laugh echoed through the prison.
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Waiting Game
That was really good! I loved how paranoid she was and nothing happened. You built up the climax pretty good and then just let it fall. I only have a ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Stars Beaming and Me Dreaming
That was good! I was hoping it was longer! The only part that I felt was out of place were the last two lines. One says you wish you weren't ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Untitled
Wow, that was really good. I loved the imagery in the first stanza; it really caught my attention and made me want to keep reading. The last stanza as well ...
Jul 12, 2011
