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Re: Balkline
I'm sorry, but you lost me after the "F" bomb. It surprised me, and kinda ruined the rest of the poem for me. The rest was good. I agree with ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: First Love
I thought it was an awesome poem! It was short, sweet, simple, and cute! I did wish it was longer, but that's perfectly fine. I didn't get the part where ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: The Meaning
Nice poem! Cool idea. Nice, short, and sweet. Other then the small nitpicks from Demoness, everything looked great. I wish it was longer, and I love poems so much more ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Smiling Misery.
Awesome. Just awesome. I loved it! I'm not going to be really picky about anything, mostly because it doesn't need it. Your rhyme scheme was perfect. The poem flows nicely ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Untitled
Great job! I loved it! My only suggestion is to fix a few puncuation errors, especially at the end of a stanza. But other then that, it flows smoothly and ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Memoria In Aeterna
Great job! I loved the poem! It was cool! It did seem like it was forced at times so that is could rhyme, and I didn't see a sylable pattern, ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Safe Haven
Wow! That was cool! I loved the feeling of the poem. It... was just awesome. I really can't think of another word to describe it. I didn't see any grammer ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: curled and dried and curled and dried
Nice poem! I agree with the things that the previous comments said, but other then that, it was awesome. It's not the type of poem I usually like, but this ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: The Murder Within
Really cool poem. I liked it. It didn't seem forced and it just fell of my tongue smoothly. Nice job! I disagree with some of the things that jaetwee said, ...
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Apprentice Games (Open, Starting)
(I didn't really explain what Nella wears. She has a black leather shirt with short sleaves, and dark pants that she tucks into her black boots.) Nella 36-40360. That's my ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls DT
I like that! I also was thinking that maybe the night before they go to attack, they stay up and talk about themselves. Since its the night before the battle, ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls [closed/starting]
Hey! Okay, so I will post tomorrow, but I wanted all of you to know that I have started a DT for Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls. Hopefully this will ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls DT
Okay, so due to recent confusion, I think it would be best to start a discussion for Rogues. Ask questions and tell us your plans here. Thanks! Hopefully this will ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls [closed/starting]
Everlee The waves of energy stop and I roll onto my stomache with a moan. I carefully pull myself to my feet and try to stand still. "Is everyone okay?" ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Rogues and Pets vs. Dolls [closed/starting]
Sorry! This posted messed with Davnick's!
Aug 11, 2011
