VioletJune

Thanks! Man haha I was starting to wonder if anyone was going to comment, I was like damn is it really that bad? But yeah haha I like the thong ...

*OK so I think I posted this in the wrong category last time, and no one commented, so I'm sorry if you've read this before but here it is.* Too ...

It was OK, and I liked it, but it felt like a kid wrote it, like you didn't know how to explain everything in the write way.

I liked it but it was a little rough, it seemed like you repeated ideas over and over.

Oh my God this is so sad :( I feel like crying but that's a good thing because that means your that good of a writer haha, nice work.

Wow! Pure geinus lol. I loved it and was laughing really hard near the end because that's happened to me :?

Too Damn Early In The Morning I roll over; my legs are twisted in the sheets but I don’t care, and bury my head in the pillow. The orange fabric ...

Hahahahah you're a genius, I am in awe of your raw brilliancy. *Gets down and bows*

I really want to know how old Jared is haha, because as soon as I started reading it i got the impression he was in fourth or fifth grade but ...

I sit at the tables in the commons, accompanied only by a couple stoner boys forced to be here by their ever present police records and a handful of other ...

Very interesting plot but I found that you repeated ideas a lot, just try to rephrase a few things and you should be fine.

OK just a couple notes haha. First off the way you describe how her parents work for the CIA is a little blunt and too straight forward, it doesn't leave ...

Yes haha I want more too, I like how robbing the jewelry store or whatever doesn't freak her out but she is kinda consumed by the bacteria and grim from ...

This poem seems really perfect to me, all the symbolism you used matched up exactly to what you were describing and I didn't want it to end :)

I think you really used your imagination on this piece, it flows pretty smoothly and is an entertaining read I only found a couple typos, nice work.