Vincent

Loved the ending! :D A few things that proved to be hicups for me was the following: - I like how you clearly showed the difference in both the characters ...

Hi Roach! When I first began reading I was a little worried, but by the time I was halfway I realised that I could'nt stop reading! :lol: It flows nicely ...

Geez, this is great work, and i could'nt stop reading. Thre are a few things I want to know: Is this a western? or does it take place sooner or ...

Oh, yeah, and sorry, but I also agree with Secret Wolf about the names, really destroyed the effect for me. Sorry. Once again, Good luck, Nice Story, Cant Wait for ...

This is a good prologue, but a few things just dont seem right, for example: were they the only survivors? and: on the ruins of a large bloody battlefield. that ...

:oops: :oops: :oops: sorry everyone. i made one very huge mistake. forgot to add my short prologue. :oops: hope this helps with reviewing! vince p.s sorry

Great story! you told in interresting short story that expands becausee of the way you did'nt tell how the captains daughter was killed. he let his mug slip from his ...

Really cool story! i enjoyed it alot! and i really have to praise you more for writing a short story that had incredidible content. Rain crashed down against the glass, ...

I edited it but can't find a better word for "oozed" thanks for the crit. i cant believe i actually missed those vince

Hello! :D this is the first time in a while that i'm posting something. this is the TOTTALY new version of Eon. i've been through it many times and ihope ...

The Story is amazing! the atmosphere was perfect! i could'nt stop reading. only a few mistakes that i noticed: The coach rounded a corner and slowed, as it neared its ...

nice poem, yet sad in a strange strange way. Rolls down my cheek And falls down To die on my shoulder. The pattern repeats Over and over Until my shoulders ...

yeah... i got it tough. its not confusing at all, you just need to see the words behind the words. i like it! vince

nice poem! —and I catch a fleeting glimpse, through the emptiness of a hall, where the souls of emperors have been framed— a ghost of a child, enmeshed with the ...

LOL!!!! just great!!!! i loved it!!!!! i liked the riming too it reminds me of someone...... try posting more like this! vince