Vettan

Hello. I will try to review the second part soon. I thought it was good, though, I think there are a couple of aspects of the story that could be ...

You live in dreams that you created, A world which is infused with hope and love. The vivid colors you imagine are, In my eyes, all lifeless and dull. Along ...

You turned around and said I’m no longer worth your time. My car got trashed by mental neighbor standing outside. And if it wasn’t for the drainage drowning me inside, ...

I was not expecting it to be so open in a sense but it was good. The last two lines of the first stanza had very odd rhyming to it. ...

It’s so easy, you’re alone Close your eyes and world is gone Not to love and not be loved And to cry in silence It’s so easy to pretend Make ...

I looked into your eyes and I realized The are no words that’ll change your mind A tear on your face has brought to mind Like winds has swept me ...

Interesting piece. I liked it but I did have a few problems with it. For me the beginning was a bit slow and stale. It felt like reading a textbook, ...

Another great chapter. I like how your tone, narration and dialogue is consistent with chapter 1. My only suggestion is to add more atmosphere. The events in this chapter have ...

The story is great and has an amazing potential. The only problem I had with it is that it left too many many aspects of the story unanswered and overall ...

I found the story to be very well written. The are only a two aspects that I would direct my attention to. In the story, mostly in the first half ...

Great first part. I will try my best to point out some aspects that I think could be improved upon. I noticed that throughout the chapter the narration either intentionally ...

Great photos. I will include a little critique for every photo. Photo 1. The clouds are indeed unusual and very beautiful. I especially like how there appears to be layers ...

Amazing job. There were only few things that were a little off for me but again overall very good drawings. For Sakura, I think that the caving (I do not ...

Good job on the story. I have read the first chapter and there are a few aspects in the presentation of the story that I was a little unsure about. ...

Dear child in frame by the window, Turn away from my tainted eyes. I believe I have not been sincere, With my heart too many times. The passage of years ...