Veritas

This was very raw and free flowing and I think i like it that way. Nothing fancy but it still has an effect. The rhyme is a bit off but ...

Beautiful prose! Highly enjoyable! You just us just enough for us to use our imaginations and I'd call that successful writing. You're rhyme was a bit off in these three ...

Hi there! The sites you mentioned are pretty good so I know you'll love YWS. I'm pretty new too but people are super nice (even when they're being critical). You ...

*Shivers* That was exceptionally. And you're only twelve?? You're going to be a poet to be feared when you're older! The detail in this poem was visually stunning and exceeds ...

Ah, another love/brokenhearted poem. Well, let see what we've got here. I've read one too many terrible love poems and I'm pleased to say that this wasn't one of them ...

The main thing I need help on with this one is the punctuation. I've been told that I could leave it the way it is and it would be fine. ...

COMPLETELY RELATE TO THIS. Shining from the crowd You might want to put a comma here. I am destined to be, Replace the comma here with a period. hopefully one ...

I, unfortunately, have you agree strongly with hopeispeace. Readers don't generally want to read about you. (As mean as hat sounds). And If you must write about you, turn you ...

Okay, I really did get a great laugh out of this one. I didn't know where you were going with it and I was a bit on edge. Then I ...

The format is intentional... Simplicity I’m here holding a little baby girl in my arms And I can’t help but to notice her Simplicity. Little baby girl, what makes you ...

I liked it at first, but then it when a little down hill, especially the last lines. Not really sure what you were talking about. I liked the overall poem ...

So I read this twice. The first time I wasn't sure if I liked it, so I took the liberty of rereading and found that I did like it. Very ...

I read this three times and here's what I got out of it: 1st time: Plain amazing! The language was so beautiful and precise that by the end I forgot ...

This is a well written emotional piece. I right pieces like this so I know where you're coming from. The mistake people often make while writing things like this is ...

Woa, okay that was unexpected. Poor child. :( The atmosphere was set from the beginning and stayed consistently dark. Very good writing skill, that is. I could picture everything (unfortunately). ...