VeraWinters

Hm, this is interesting. In a way it's a bit of a cliched love poem, It really sucks when your trying to write love poetry because most aspects are kind ...

When I'm 16 I'll steal chocolate and pick roses. When I'm 17 I'll Eat cake and maybe someone will give me a key. When I'm 18 I'll stay in hostels ...

I actually like this. I did not think I would but it is kind of refreshing and strong. Keep writing like you mean it Vera

Hm, pretty good. I really like the flow. It practically rolls on my tongue. But some of the lines feel a little unnecessary. Like Or the seven skies blazing blue, ...

Good I really like this. A nice turn on the avadrede love poem with a good flow and wording. Good Job Keep writing like you mean it Vera

Hm I'm not really feeling this. It's OK but it could be a lot better. It feels like you have spent 25 lines complaining about some one for being mean ...

Hm. This is a interesting peice. The good It dose not feel silly. And It is often common with these kind of gothic devil and hell works A really good ...

Hm. I'm not hugely into this. It's kind of the average, the concept- boy meets girl, they fall in love, save each other, mean the world to each other, blah, ...

Wow a really good piece The good Your use of language, it's figurative and beautiful, that was my favorite part of this piece. Texture: I read this piece 4 times ...

Very nice. But there are a couple of problems. The first paragraph is all happy, but then you start talking about corruption and condoms, it's a bit confusing. Secondly, it ...

Id also like to mention that this does not seem like a R rated piece. It has no harsh language, sex or possibly offending themes. Just like to mention. Keep ...

wow, really great, very lyrical and textured, well done keep writing like you mean it Vera

You seem to have made a boring event interesting, it's a great skill to have. It feels a little long in places, i believe a bit could be cut out, ...

hm, I don't really understand what this is about. I think it might be A maid starting her morning because of her last line but I can't be sure. You ...

colours of summer dance unseen to all but you for the rest escape in oceans of misery and waves of regret your smile of white blossoms eyes rejoice a forgotten ...