Ventomology

Yay, thanks! And I shall try to find this book you've mentioned. It sounds amazing.

I was going to leave a review, and then I read that anaconda down there and realized Pies had picked out practically everything. Soo... good job mostly.

I wasn't expecting a review on chapter 1, but thanks a lot!

Aww, thanks!

Yo, Pinkie! Thanks for the review! (And don't worry: I think I've gotten more description into the later chapters.)

You're precisely right!

My one and only comment today is to not always start a paragraph of dialogue with quotation marks. It's mostly an aesthetics thing, and makes the work look better, as ...

ACK! A typo! I shall fix that right away. As for the second note, that was explained in an earlier chapter. Thanks for the review! I'm really glad someone's reading ...

Hiya! I only have one little comment for you today, so no actual reviewing. Anyways, I believe that in the second scene, while you had good action, you might want ...

Nope, not really.

Yeah. Precisely.

Oh no, not building up on Kalan's injuries! I meant like... more suspense and worry over what happened to Kalan. Geez, I'm just sputtering nonsense today.

I know Kalan's injuries must be bad, but the build-up was what I was focusing on. (Maybe I should work on my ability to communicate ideas better...) Sorry if I ...

Yo! I know I didn't review the last two chapters... sorry about that. But they were all so good! Anyway, I only have one comment for you today, and that ...

Oh... you can tell me any way you want. I think most people usually post it on my wall though.