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Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Seven, Part Three - Not so Great Expectations
They are probably in hot water, but not 'they all three of them.' Also, I am now caught up! I think all that baking helped with my motivation. Now, moving ...
Sun Dec 13, 2015 1:46 am -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Seven, Part Two - Not so Great Expectations
Um, harsh? I am starting to not like Mrs Williams. Maybe instead of sending him home, someone could find a way to prevent him from falling asleep in class. Anyways, ...
Sun Dec 13, 2015 1:20 am -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Six, Part Five - Midweek Action
Finally... I made it... after baking cookies for five hours. I suppose I should get on with the review so I can catch up, no? General Comments: Adverbs , Hunter. ...
Sun Dec 13, 2015 12:55 am -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 18): Paranoia and Boredom Mix Surprisingly Well
I have home internet again, so here I am, ready to (mostly) catch up! Let's get on with the show, shall we? General Comments: 1. I don't like picking on ...
Sun Dec 13, 2015 12:30 am -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 17): Privacy, I See
HA! MIKHAIL HAS SECRETS I KNEW IT! Anyways... on with the review? General Comments: I probably have said the following in the past, but I was searching for something constructive ...
Mon Nov 30, 2015 6:17 am -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 16): Exploring Equals Fun
Whoo, I made it! Sorry this took me like forever. General Comments: Hmm... somehow, there just seemed to be several places where I sensed a disjoint between action and reaction, ...
Mon Nov 30, 2015 3:55 am -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Seven, Part One - Not so Great Expectations
I'm caught up! Hopefully I'll stay that way too, since I have actual free time now. General Comments: I love the dialogue in this story. It's so weird, but so ...
Sun Nov 29, 2015 6:45 pm -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Six, Part Eight - Midweek Action
It's been what, three weeks since I read the last chapter? This is not good planning on my part. Anyways, going on: General Comments: If you're going to add in ...
Sun Nov 29, 2015 6:20 pm -
Re: The Broken Heart of the Mad King (His Swan Song)
Hey, Silver! I am here as promised! I figured I would steal this piece before the crazy review day people start up. You probably haven't gotten many reviews from me ...
Sat Nov 28, 2015 9:16 pm -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 15): Hide-and-Hide
I am giddy from the two-hour delay and measly inch of snow we got at home, so I am here early! Hoorah! Anyways, let's see what I've got. General Comments: ...
Tue Nov 24, 2015 2:54 pm -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 14): Winning Without a Spin
Okie dokie... General Comments: 1. To be completely honest, I think whatever you'd been doing earlier with your writing felt more alive. Adding in details where you didn't leave space ...
Wed Nov 11, 2015 11:23 pm -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Six, Part Seven - Midweek Action
Um... weird methods much, Mr. Van der Brunnen? Anyways, let's get on with this review. General Comments: 1. Little note on the hyphenating of long numbers: to avoid overwhelming your ...
Wed Nov 11, 2015 10:09 pm -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Six, Part Six - Midweek Action
Ah, we finally get a glimpse of the move tiers... Minerva's got a nice set of options to pick from. General Comments: 1. As much as I appreciate the more ...
Wed Nov 11, 2015 9:26 pm -
Re: Unorthodox Thieves (Chap. 13): Ending it with a Bang
Yeah, fight scenes! I love fight scenes. I promise you they are not filler, especially when they end in way epic plot twists like this one here at the end. ...
Sun Oct 25, 2015 10:06 pm -
Re: The Adventures of Darren Cassidy - Chapter Six, Part Four - Midweek Action
And look who definitely got around to reviewing this before the end of the week... Anyways, review time! General Comments Whoop. None. Something about this chapter feels sloppy, but since ...
Sun Oct 25, 2015 9:27 pm
