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Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 6 - Paying Court
Hello! Sorry for the long wait. I kept meaning to leave a review, but every time I read through this, I never seem to have anything to add! So I ...
Aug 28, 2019 -
Re: The Digital Man
Hi! It's been a while since I reviewed a short story, but hopefully I can offer at least a little bit of advice. Also were you inspired by Black Mirror ...
Aug 27, 2019 -
Re: Chapter 1: The Gilmore Guy and Mariano Girl
Hi!! I keep seeing your name on the review leaderboards, but I didn't realize you had works in the GR! So, not really part of the review, but just a ...
Aug 26, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (42)
Wow. You did it! You finished! Congratulations!!! Getting through a whole novel and doing lms are no easy feat, and here you are! Awesome job! Chapter-Specific Notes: 1. I generally ...
Aug 24, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (41.2)
Here I am, back again! FYI, I read ahead through chapter 42 in order to help me gather my thoughts on this chapter, and so that I can offer feedback ...
Aug 24, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (41.1)
Hey. Hey can you stop with the cliff hangers for like two seconds. I feel like I'm about to have a heart attack every time I finish a chapter I ...
Aug 24, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 5 - The Whitestar Household
Hey I'm back! Let's dive right in: 1. Basically the first half of this chapter is just us being told about the household. There isn't really any action in it, ...
Aug 24, 2019 -
Re: Lohikarmen: A tale of humans and dragons (Chapter 8: A new home)
Hey! I'm back, as promised. Let's get this show on the road. 1. Nice opening line! I love me some personification and imagery. Plus they're establishing the location nicely. 2. ...
Aug 23, 2019 -
Re: Lohikarmen: A tale of humans and dragons (Chapter 7: The slave dragoness)
Hi hello let's dive right back in! 1. LanaOverland has already pointed out how some of the phrasing is a little odd. I know you're not a native English speaker, ...
Aug 22, 2019 -
Re: Lohikarmen: A tale of humans and dragons (Chapter 5: The Great Hunt)
Hello hello I'm back! Your work is yet again the oldest in the Green Room. It's a shame this hasn't been getting more love though. It's a fun read! 1. ...
Aug 21, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (40.2)
And I am caught up yet again. Let's do this. 1. So I know I have complimented the way magic is incorporated into the world and plot of this story. ...
Aug 19, 2019 -
Re: Servant of the White Sun - Chapter 4 - Shelter of the Sun
Hey! This is currently the oldest piece in the GR, so I thought I'd drop by. It looks like other chapters are also still in the GR, so chances are ...
Aug 18, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (40.1)
Hello hello. I am so exhausted that I didn't even want to sit up at my computer so I'm writing this on my phone. Please forgive me for any unusual ...
Aug 18, 2019 -
Re: Lohikarmen: A tale of humans and dragons (Chapter 3: The dragons' refuge)
Hello hello! I've seen this chapter at the bottom of the GR several times, so here I am! I have very briefly skimmed over the past two chapters, but I ...
Aug 17, 2019 -
Re: The Hero's Brother (39.2)
And I'm caught up. What a journey! 1. So I know we often tell ourselves not to use weird dialogue tags, or use them too often, but I feel like ...
Aug 16, 2019