Venom

Plain and simple, I pretty much despise this piece. I fell as if I sort of lost it towards the end of the story, and that the conversation that takes ...

I am just going to dive right into edits, and I'll give a general impression at the end of this post, 'kay? Which poses the question of why I am ...

First of all, I'd just like to see that I liked this piece a lot. I thoroughly enjoy flash fiction. Anyway, as a previous reviewer said, the way you started ...

@Vonghese; I really appreciate your review. I don't know very much about fighting, so the things you pointed out to me are extremely helpful, especially since you have experience. Also, ...

My opponent's eyes glitter mischievously under the dimly lit streetlights. Sweat-soaked strands of black hair cling to her reddened cheeks as she sizes me up, studying every inch of my ...

Let me begin with saying that it is extremely rare for stories on this website to catch my attention. I usually only read them halfway before giving up, yet with ...

Though it isn't complete, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was definitely told.. differently than most, but it was enjoyable, nonetheless. I didn't spot any punctuation or grammatical errors. The one ...

I am going to nitpick. Things in bold are my changes. As my two friends and I pushed through the front doors of our school comma I suddenly felt a ...

'Run,' the voice in my head snaps at me. I flinch away from its biting tone, the word slicing into me like a freshly sharpened blade. Every muscle in my ...

In the dim light, I could see that my brown eyes where a bright shimmering blue. It should be were. Someone came into existence behind me, there face above my ...

I am just going to dive right in. “Y-yes , my lord.” There should be a comma between yes and my lord. Also, I believe a question mark would be ...

“No, I don’t mind coming down here, Beca . Don’t get the wrong idea. I haven’t seen you in… what’s it been now?” I believe you are missing a C. ...

Me, right before the Hollywood Undead and BrokeNCYDE concert. Another picture that I took right before the concert.

8/10 Nice taste in music. 1. Dead and Gone - T.I. ft. Justin Timberlake 2. Womanizer - Britney Spears 3. Chop Suey - System of a Down 4. This Love, ...

9/10 for numbers 1, 2, 3, and 5. 1. I Got Your Money - Say Anything 2. Umbrella - All Time Low 3. Why Don't You Get A Job? - ...