Velvet.whispers

Hey this is wonderful, a lot more focused than the last one i reviewed, the only thing critique I can think of is that your ending is really disappointing! Here ...

Wow, I love this, it's a bit awkward at moments, but even it's awkwardness has it's value: you know how sometimes a work's weakness is it's greatest asset, while I ...

Dear iCarlyfan had you read what is posted above, you would know that this is what is known as a french sonnet, and that for this type of sonnet there ...

Haha you are so gullible, it is rhyme lol xx

Hey, although I love short poems, I think this one could be a little longer, it would give your surprising ending a little twist. I saw you're new here and ...

Nope it wasn't you, it was June/ spring rain!

haha no darko, i cannot give you my name, that would just ruin all the fun of it! If my screen name is mysterious, it shall remain so! As for ...

To Pgsgirl7 and iCarlyfan, read Keats and you'll understand that anglophone poetry is not about reality or what "makes sense", but about what manages to create a mental image, an ...

He is proud, arrogant, stubborn and tall. My lord's armour is of leather, his visor of plastic, When he speaks of me he is not lyrical but sarcastic; And he ...

Hey i like this, some bits are weird, and some images aren't quite right, but there are some really nice ones! I love the sailor and the bird bit, it's ...

Were my eyes sunflowers of gold: Your face would be the the sun they wish to behold. When your light shines through the tears I cannot withhold, Watch the upside ...

Ok, here goes stanza by stanza! From my view sitting on the graffitied bus bench, I watched the cars reflecting the light like sea glass As they drove past. A ...

Hey, i think this is interesting because it's so elliptic and mysterious, but I might suggest on reworking the shape of it, or maybe writing a second stanza, maybe give ...

Here goes chronologically: I'm afraid that the stanza is not, in my opinion better without the suddenly, because otherwise the rhythm is too regular and conventional which makes the stanza ...

Black sailed tears my young one is a metaphor for tears as ships with black sails!! And no, it's not a typo, the apostrophe indicates the fact I have voluntarily ...