Velvet.whispers

Yuh, I guess, snillaz, do you think it should be longer, like more details about every single lie, and building up a world around her, sort of like more Tim ...

Thank you very much!!! Again, I'm still suprised that this has gotten such a welcome! xx

Thanks to all for answering, sorry I've been a bit absent lately... Eraqio and Pringle, this is about the lies not their consequences or other poepl, it's supposed to speak ...

Hah, well if you notice that the While starts with a capital letter, you get that's it's a new setence. "order" is more of an intrerjection. And I did start ...

Hah, thanks tab13, but tell me what's the point of requoting the whole poem? I already know what I wrote!

Gee thanks WhiteTiger93 :D

Thanks to all for the reviews and gold stars!! I have to say I'm rather surprised that this seems to be what has been most appreciated among everything that I've ...

No, i disagree with conrad rice, Having a clear narrative would ruin the evocative poetry of this piece, it's special because we're not quite sure what happened. Th main character ...

I'm going to have to agree with everyone here. The only title I can possibly think up is "three weeks with a runaway", but yours works even if something is ...

I looooove this *clicks gold star* I'm not going to get you about commas, firstly because i didn't really notice any mistakes, secondly because i'm sure someone else will be ...

Lyra looked out of the window, slowly tracing the words engraved on the panel of the windowsill, under a cushion, "Lyra doesn't lie". The day was grey and dreary, nothing ...

Wow great stuff !! You've really got your tone going, provo, snazzy, quirky! I LOVE THIS, it's so insane, and beautiful... Have you read some Martin Amis? This sort of ...

Ok I really wanted to review this in detail, but have been beaten to it, To that, I can only express my sincerest regret, my deepest admiration for your wonderful ...

B y clear skies liberty flies O r else desire slowly dies R andom letters and numbers E rrors and questions and slumbers D ay by day anxiety sighs unlearning ...

Mmm you're quite the provocateur aren't you?! This is good, it flows well, has meaning and intention. I's wonderful to see someone who notices things like that, you have a ...