Velvet.whispers

There, mistakes edited away, sorry was a bit tired, thank you for pointing it out!

Woah, this totally blew me away, I love the prose poetry, even though the rhymes can be a bit artificial, don't get locked in to your rhyme scheme or meter, ...

Heya this is pretty good, just a few pineckity details : You're using past tense, so stay in it = your dislike crippled my wrist , not "cripples". Try and ...

Still not sure what it means! x

Hi, I'm velvet, nice to meet you. I was struck by this piece, because I remember something similar happening to me, a girls thing at school, bitchy and catyness. I ...

Cold hearted, cold. Sad and lonely. Wishing, wishing, But not daring enough. Wanting, wanting, But not daring... Yearning, yearning, But not... Pining, pining, But... Like the smell of the woods, ...

Hey! This is amazing. I'm not even supposed to be on YWS (stupid exams) but this just caught my eye. I love it, it's so mysterious. Sorry i haven't got ...

I. Facing death brings out the best and worst in men. Some choose to fight, they choose to live forever. Others choose despair, fear and anger; they choose nightless sleeps ...

Hey, i promise to make these edits, fast. I don't know whether I'll reuse Gemma or not, I was thinking of collected Fragments of characters, sort of half like a ...

hah, thanks to all for the reviews. Apparently the names are problematic, they're a mixture of welsh and old English. I pronounce them as they're written, the "Ae" like Aeneus, ...

Hey! So, a review for a review eh? I guess this is a beguinning of a story then... I'm going to start with the bad. a) it's terribly cliché, we've ...

She walked furtively along the road; her blonde hair glowing softly and her stiletto heals making a resolute clac clac on the pavement. She was very pretty and seemed to ...

Ælëd the Foolish of the Téïne Anåil. This story started as many do at midnight on a night of full moon. Ælëd was restless. She could not go to sleep. ...

Hey this is cool! I like :D It's really obsessive which is good cause you carry on reading it without noticing the mistakes etc which other people seem to be ...

Peace girl! So are you! hah, ok yeah, i'll see what i can do.. "practice makes perfect" right? Anyways, i'm still debating whether or not to write something for a ...