Velvet.whispers

Dear mikeypro, This is, well very, Beckett! The language is simple and superficial, but the building up of the flow hints at something greater and more absurd, and more beautiful. ...

Dear Writer, what a quaint sonnet! I feel like you can do better than this though. Actually was curious because I once had to write an essay on what is ...

Dear all, thank you for your comments, I didn't spend much time on this, I guess they're more lyrics than poetry because I did hum them when I wrote them, ...

Dear SmylinG, I see you have just reviewed mine as I was about to do this, funnily enough I'm going to make the opposite commentary, this piece looks like too ...

I agree with Miracles, I think this is short, bittersweet and holds the swell of beautiful ambition, flowing like tides of the sea. I love the concept and the rhythm ...

She is the girl with the rainbow smile, And as she lies, Inside she dies, And when she cries, She sais bye-byes. She is the girl with the rainbow smile, ...

In the crossed-line of melancholy, One sits and waits patiently, Smiling at chaos Praying to loss. One feels clumsy In this incomprehensible intensity, A fleeting look, a laugh While every ...

This is really lovely! Great flow, great description, quite mysterious and elliptic as well! I like it, it's the sort one can read again and again and again and still ...

Hey, this is really simple and sweet. I love the natural delivery and this shows promise, but try and think about how each sentence sounds more, repeat your words in ...

This tells you who you are Will you bear it in Pride or in Shame, Badge or Label, Red Cross or Yellow Star? Darling, it’s your name. So as I ...

Have you ever wanted to ask what I dream of, when I gaze out of the window for hours on end, eyes wide in wonder? DO you think you know ...

Dear Tanith, I like this, a lot, It's one of the most original pieces I've read here. Your rhythm is wonderful, and the repetition is brilliantly carried out! Well done! ...

Thank you all, glad you enjoyed it.

The sun shines bright the birds sing softly Nothing moves Except for the wind brushing its fingers through the fabric of the world. The lawn is green and freshly mown, ...

"things I have done", you presume too much maybe ?!