Vasticity

Rock me Amadeus by Falco German pop ftw

Your spelling and punctuation and grammar and all that are fine, but the poem is too short to paint a picture or tell a story. If you make it longer ...

Two words: PUNCTUATION and SPELLING. I'm just going to go through the whole thing here because it's pretty short. The mistakes are in red and my notes are in blue. ...

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Let me just start off by saying I've never written anything but scripts except for the YWS Olympics and something when I was like 5, so this is probably terrible, ...

Mix/Vasticity would make a good pairing or maybe Isha/Vasticity. Then there's always the love triangle thing, Mix/Vasticity/Isha, that'd be fun. xD Epic fail

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I have a very specific vision in mind for this movie I'm writing, which is kind of important because I'm intending to sell it, where the characters and situations are ...

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Well, I joined this year, and it's pretty much all I do all day is go on this site. So you're my life now, and I'm glad I found YWS ...

I'm not so good with songs (I only listen to orchestra) so I'm just going to review the TECHNICAL aspects of your writing. Okay, let's see here: Wrapped in a ...

This is a very interesting poem. The way you the words are written makes me think that someone clearly wrote them with passion. You have grammar and spelling all right, ...

Very well done. You certainly paint a picture I can see, and the way you subtley describe things is the best part of it. I agree with Kwantack on the ...

Well done! Though it's too short, it does manage to envoke emotion in the reader and make him want to see the rest of the story. So just make it ...

Hi. I'm going to start off by saying there's something weird about this poem. It's kind of confusing what you're talking about, and because of that, it comes off as ...