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Your improvement is incredible! By just these two examples I can see you have definitely learned quite a few tricks and concepts. Do you still use paint?

Grabbed me. Amazing.

Haha, Snoink, my spelling is pretty consistent till you throw the "ie"s at me. I'm a total loss when it comes to remembering which word should have an "i" before ...

Thank you so much for the feedback guys! Justtrying, thanks for the input on structure! I should be shooting for that kind of thing... HessicaJolt, that's exactly what the poem ...

I'm all for the third. : ) The first just looks like a picture slapped on a cover. Don't take offense to that, it's a cool picture. The second one ...

This is a...umm... well I'm not sure. I called it "poetry" when I had to hand in for English class...but in all reality, I don't really know what to call ...

Hello there! First off, I loved this. You set up the perfect story that is paced just right and keeps the reader readin' to find out some answers. I liked ...

Having a tendency to be cynical, I'm all over this story with a bit of a skeptical mindset, but also very well enjoying it. Overall, I liked it. I feel ...

All right, I'm not here to start any flaming, but I'm going to bounce SassyKat's critique. My turn to quote! I've got stresses up to here, Constant whispers in my ...

I like the subject of the poem, mostly because I think it's something we all can relate to at some point. But to me it's not to....I don't know flowing ...

Okay, before I write out this whole response, let me say that I couldn't read the full article because my computer wouldn't load it. Anyhow, I think this is actually ...

I really enjoyed this so far! However, I have a few loose ends that need some tying up. The beginning starts with people severed to pieces--who killed them? I take ...

Well said! I think the world needs to learn a few things from this. As well as many Christians. Very, very well said.

I just want to get this out there before I say anything else: this story is fantastic. I've always wanted to read a fantasy gamer story like this, and I ...

I really enjoy this!!! I have to admit, your writing style, though simply beautiful, is a little hard to follow. "My gaze dropped in front of me again. A ballad ...