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Re: A new home, A new Love ( ch 4 p2)
Dude, I love this story. Please write more soon. Lol. :) It's very suspenseful and keeps you on the edge of your seat. Probably the only useful thing I can ...
Feb 23, 2010 -
Re: Suicide, The Note.
It was good. Definitely different. I liked it. Maybe make it a little longer? It was really short. You might could try explaining it a little bit. Otherwise it was ...
Feb 21, 2010 -
Re: Love From Music: Chapter 3
Love From Music Chapter 3 Slam! Kaylin woke with a start as a door slammed shut. When she opened her eyes, she saw that her wrists were still bound, but ...
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: The Slick Floor Chapter 7
Okay. I really like this story. It's got an edge of suspense to it. I think that that is what keeps most people reading is that they have to know ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: Two Souls - Chapter 1
It was really good and detailed. However, there were a few grammar mistakes...unless you put them in there intentionally. Lol. Shew? I think show or showed? Usualed to? Maybe used ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: Love From Music: Chapter 2
Love From Music Chapter 2 When Kaylin woke up, she had a splitting headache, and she felt slightly sick to her stomach. She had no clue where she was. After ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: Love From Music
Lol. It'll make sense once I get more put up. That's just the beginning. There is more coming soon. :)
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: Love From Music
Chapter 1 It was raining. Kaylin was sitting on her bed crying. Earlier that day she had seen her boyfriend Alex making out with some other girl. “How could he ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: The Slick Floor chapter 4
I loved it. It was great. Still confusing the forms of there again. Just be kinda careful with that. Other than that, I thought it was great. :) I can't ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: The Slick Floor- Prologue/ Chapter 1
Wow. I loved this story. It was absolutely amazing. :) As soon as I'm done here I'm going to go read the next part. There were a few grammar errors. ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: A new home, A new Love ( ch 1)
Hey! Vanilla here. I really like your story. I really want to read more. :) There were a few grammar errors. I noticed that you were using the wrong forms ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Small Steps
Hi. VanillaTwilight here. I just gotta say that I loved this piece. It demonstrates perfectly what so many girls go through. I really didn't find any grammar errors. I loved ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Blue Rose
Okay. Personally I thought it was good. A little short, but good. However, I definitely reccommend proof reading. There were a few instances where your subject didn't agree with your ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Say
Hey, JD. I just want to say first that i love this story, and the way you incorporated the John Mayer song is really awesome. It had a good story ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: As You Like It (Title subject to change)
Ah! I want to read more. :) It was really good. I think this has already been said, but it definitely flows smoothly. I really couldn't see any problems with ...
Feb 1, 2010