Vanadis

Hi there! I sort of like this. It seems really emotional. You said you wanted a comment on a vibe...I'd say a bit sad and despairing. I'd imagine it would ...

Hi SilentOllie! This is very sweet; it made me smile at the end. It reminds me that somehow, even if you're pursuing your grandest dreams, those you love somewhat keep ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! So. You've got a nice bit of dialogue here; I like how you integrate speech with actions. No "she said this, she said that." That's ...

Hiya Jame! Welcome to YWS! First off, I'd like to say I enjoyed this so much! It's light and bittersweet in a very pleasing way. Your rhyme didn't seem forced, ...

Hello! So, you've got some good groundwork laid here. What you've got to do is expand upon it. First of all, I like the "giving up without giving up" part. ...

Hiya Padre! Nice to meet you. So...I really, really loved this. Could be the fact that I have, er, a thing for heads getting lopped off with axes, apparently, but ...

"Don't be so modest and call it a doodle." But it was a doodle! XD

My first reaction was: "Awww! It's a cute little fluffball! I want one!" Only thing I can really see right now is that his left paw (your right) is a ...

Yeah, it was intentional lack of caps and punctuation. Thanks all for the good advice and the likes. And it's my second poem, really, but...same thing. :) I don't really ...

Hi Connie! I like this idea but it seems a little unfinished. It reminds me of all the times I've just completely left a place, but there was still always ...

Hello mSoleil! I'm Freyja and I'll be taking a look at this. First of all, I like the subject matter and how short and sweet it is. I like that ...

Hi Halcyon! Second poem, eh? Welcome to YWS! First of all, if you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask. Nice work at first glance. It can use some revision, ...

Verdandi doubled back as quickly as she could, stopping in front of Tara. She lowered herself a bit. "Doctor, please get on my back and hold tight to my waist. ...

My earphone wire is frayed and the sound keeps cutting out. :(

It's okay. *pats shoulder.* There really wasn't a way you could have known for sure.