Vampy_Girl15

I was running down towards the phone in the den by the second ring. I was just about to grab it when my evil brother, Kevin, pushed me out of ...

*Sorry if this is too late. I've just never done one of these... Sounded fun!* Name: Clarissa Yatting [y-at-ing] Age:16 Personality: She's kind of a dork. She is ALWAYS reading. ...

It's a good concept but you got a little comma happy in some places. Just watch your punctuation.;) It's great and I can't wait to read more. Keep writing! ~Rachael

Wow! This was great, I loved the concept. Have you ever thought about getting published? The ending was very strong. Keep writing your great! ~Rachael

Hey everyone! My name is Rachael. You can really call me anything you want but some of my nicknames are Snow White, Rae Rae, Rach, and Rachie. I like different ...

I felt a sharp pain go down my neck and through my veins. Somewhere in the back of my mind I could hear the music, but not really. He had ...

I agree the second one is the best. It's longer and more interesting. I can't wait to read the rest. Keep writing! ~Rachael

I agree this can't really be judged as a poem. I don't agree with Brad though...You shouldn't throw it away. It's a perfectly good piece of work. You could Change ...

Everyone thank you so much. I'll try fixing it up a bit, adding more metaphors and things.

It's a strong start. I enjoyed reading it, but as the others said there are a few punctuation errors. They aren't that bad though, easily fixed with the backspace key. ...

It's a great plot! I loved reading it and if it becomes a book i will be very interested in reading the rest; so keep up the good work. I ...

Well, it's a good start. If you could add life to it I'm sure it would be great. This poem as very good potential.

Sitting in a sea full of people All around Yet I’m still alone Sitting in a sea full of people They are talking Not to me Sitting in a sea ...

It was sweet and i'm sure your girlfriend will love it! I loved the flow of the words. Your similes are wonderful. If my boyfriend read me that poem i ...

I liked that a lot. I enjoy poems or books about love. I like that there isn't really a rhythm. The poem still flows well. Great job!