Vampy_Girl15

I looked at the vampire and got in his way of Tex. He wouldn't be having human tonight.

I liked the vocabulary you used in this!(I like it when people use intelligent vocab.) :D This was a good start and I disagree with 'God'. It doesn't sound like ...

I batted the stick away. She was really pissing me off. Why did she bring us here? Her tabbies had us... I was starting to wonder if demons could eat ...

I looked over my shoulder at the new kid, Seda. He was sitting in a tree watching us. His light brown hair was shining in the sun. "Okay," I said ...

Tex looked pissed. I put my hand on his shoulder, trying to tell him it was okay. I saw Sam standing over us with some shapeshifter. "Just let us go ...

A gaurd was going after Jaskar. He was headed straight for him. I saw a nice sord mounted on the wall. I flicked my wrist and held it right at ...

Shiro was trying to get me to focus. I'd told him to leave me but of course he wouldn't. "Shiro, you need to get me away from you." I groaned. ...

"I can't," I whimpered. I could barley stand much less run. Shiro looked concered, I didn't want them to get caught. I could hear gaurds coming, at least I'd gotten ...

I don't think you should separate: She longs to enter It would sound better and less chopy if you connect them. Also saying 'She' 3 times in a row is ...

Medusa found all the mistakes I did so I can just tell you what I thought, which is still good. :D I liked your word choice. The poem flowed well. ...

I liked how you did the stanzas. Some people put it in just one block. I think you did good with the punctuation. :D All in all I like this. ...

I looked up to a big hole in the ceiling. It was night outside now. I stood up bracing myself with the bars. "Shiro, can you see what it is?"

"You can't help me, It's not what you think." I muttered. I think Shiro knew. He'd told her to get away.

I couldn't tell Shiro the truth. They'd all be scared of me. I couldn't risk that. Every time I looked at someone all I saw was their veins. I needed ...

I opened my eyes and looked over. They had caught another one. She was crusing them as they threw her down. I could smell her blood pumping. No! I thought. ...