Vampirewolf3

I didn't like this. It was the typical vampire/slayer story and the blooddrinking and vampire-turning processes were glossed over. It wasn't meaningful and the characters weren't new or different or ...

What's the longest you've ever had to stand without the chance to lean or sit? "Waitin' for the chair to be invented!" Uncle Hertle. Define normal.

Do you ever watch the dawn? No. I'm too tired to wake up." Frurder the Koala Have you heard the cry of raven?

I wish I were able to fence tomorrow, rather than stuck finishing a bloody presentation for Western Civ. Granted, but now you have to do Western Civ. reports for the ...

Granted, but now it is 1 inch by 1 inch by 1 inch. (That wasn't so bad, wasn't it?) I wish I could become a Speaker of the Forum. (Rofl)

Hunterzero pointed most of them out, but there is just one thing. You have too many cliche-ish type events. Try to come up woth something original.

Just one thing. "You must learn not to feel pity for the weak. Learn this, and you will become stronger. Your opponent will find this weakness, and use it to ...

boys + eyeliner = something i cannot even begin to comprehend

A long time ago, in a kingdom by the sea, lived the Naughty Sorceress* and me with nothing in my mind lest to defeat her, and for her, to defeat ...

:cry: It's almost like Poe, except not sadistic and pessimistic enough. Rofl-copter. I like it. It is pretty hard to write a good & different love poem.

Join the club. Everyone here is warm, friendly, and 123% dedicated to writing. Right? Erm, right? Hello? (Find myself completely alone)...just kidding. Just give me a PM and I'll help ...

Hola euterpe13! (My spanish is gettin' rusty) I remember when I was new...(dreamy look)If you have any questions or need a crit, PM me, and I will come and say ...

I'm not quite sure where I can begin my story. I would liek to skip to the part with all the action, but then there is some stuff I need ...

her eyes like Thoreau’s meadows; who's Thoreau? Sorry for being a n00l3. :shock: Other than that, it's good. Keep it up!

Oooh. I liked Eragon. It was a pretty (who am I kidding? awesome) book i liked this little exerpt from arya's imprisonment