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Thanks your a very very big help. Mackenzie

About the talking to the reader, it's in her point of veiw and most people would think that. Thanks for the advice.

Ok. I thought poetry had to ryhme. I suck at writing poetry. I should stick to fantasy.

My horrible poem. When I'm bored at night and I don't feel right and alone I don't go on moan I look out outside The stars shine with the moonlight ...

Thank you so much for the advice and thanks for not reading my question and going like most people do. Thanks I appreciate the answer, well I'm off to read ...

I'd really like it if you guys didn't read and go. Comment please even if it's tips, they are really helpful! Tell me what you think of it, if it's ...

Hey there Aina, I started reading but I lost interest because 1. I knew hardly ANYTHING about the main character,which makes me wonder what the person is like which gets ...

I knew was she spoke was true, That doesn't make sense. Change to " I knew what she spoke of was true". Other than that I thought it was really ...

Thanks!

One question I have always asked myself : how do you write poetry?! - mackenzie

I just joined this website yesterday and love it. I just wanna say thanks if you gave a chance on me and helped and didn't ignore me like most people ...

I stood from my vantage point Um, That's not the best opening line. Opening lines should be really interesting, descriptive and make you wanna keep reading. I found this quite ...

By the way, I love your title for it. It really caught my attention. Good luck and I hope tons of people read it. Have you written more than chapter ...

Then, I will read it. ;D

I think you should rate this so people know who the audience is for. Just in case, for non-age appropriate things. =)