VampireBloodrace

*stares at the picture* *doesn't know she's drooling* a...m...a...z...i...n...g! That is really incredible! I'm amazed at how uniquely drawn it is! I'm really jealous... one of the hooves doesn't look

*stares at the picture* *doesn't know she's drooling* a...m...a...z...i...n...g! That is really incredible! I'm amazed at how uniquely drawn it is! I'm really jealous... one of the hooves doesn't look

This is something I drew in 7th grade. Colored in by Larara *His expression is like it is because, when I drew him, I didn't want him to be afraid ...

"So wait," I said confused. "Vampires are just an improved version of a human?!" Aton smiled widely. "Correct, my dear." "How can that be?!" I growled, my body beginning to ...

“Fail,” I muttered, stepping out of the piece of junk Michael called a car. “Fail?!” he said, as if not expecting it. He scrambled out of his car, his half ...

I'm sorry if this sounds confusing and if it does - tell me! I'll do my best to fix it! Please bear with me! I've been kinda absent minded lately ...

Sorry there isnt' much to critique, but it seems as though everyone has pointed everything out! I really like the idea of the Salem Witch Trials. It's rather ironic since ...

I jumped to my feet, took a few steps back, and got ready to defend or attack. "What do you want?" "Geez, you don't have to be so violent," she ...

bad! I meant Carrison

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G! I've never seen anyone who could write a fanfiction so well! And also the emotion and atmosphere was just amazing! Great way of portraying what happens after the war ...

It's a good beginning and you are getting that atmosphere started. I agree with the others - it's too CHEESY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I loved the details! And I actually read the whole thing! Usually, when there are a bunch of details, I skip the paragraph or stop reading the story. Very intriguing ...

When she got there, she found that Kitsune was there, too, but she was crying. I'd say you should get rid of the comma after 'there'. I don't know if ...

She fell into a heap on the ground, only to be picked up again by her neck again. Lol, too many agains!!!!!! Your readers will drown with this many!!! "You ...

"Kularoka was a murder, and a damn good one at that. Lol, I think you meant to put 'murderer'. Not 'murder' I think it's good!!!! Of course, like you, I ...