VampX13

Thank you everyone. I appreciate all critiques and opinions. :-) To clear up a few things, I had intended this to be a short piece. Although both characters in it ...

As with everyone else, I can't even begin to critique this but can only stand in awe and gape at its wonderment. What did I like? Just about everything. The ...

Thanks to both of you for critiquing my work. I have read your suggestions and applied those that I also agreed with. I greatly appreciate all and any advice. Thanks! ...

Wow. I really liked this. I suggest you consider questioning some of your fragments, for flow-sake. Consider using a semi-colon or comma sometimes, instead of fragmenting; although, I do understand ...

Just a couple reviews would be appreciated. I'd like to improve the above piece.

Will do. And, thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

She pulled him closer, feeling every inch of his body tight against hers. Clawing, pulling at his shirt, and seeking out skin like an animal. Her want was raw; she ...

This is adorable and well thought out. I commend you. Although... I do believe it belongs in the poetry section. It seems very free-versy. Still good, though. But more good ...

Hmm. It was a really well done for your first try and the scene you write out has a very natural movement, in means of visualising. But I'm going to ...

[NOTE. Another random clipping from the same story. Not sure where I'm going to slip it in. Bee or Barbie is the pink haired girl Glen saw at the bus-stops. ...

[NOTE. This is a loverly character-based story that I'm working on, and will--hopefully--go somewhere... Where? I'm not too sure yet. But I sure like Glen and hope you do too. ...

Thanks again, everyone! I really apprecaite the critiques and comments. Keep them coming. Also I have just edited to make the alterations and corrections suggested that I agreed with (... ...

Thanks, guys. Really appreciate it. It is a oneshot. And was written for a writer's craft course I'm taking. I've never thought of turning it into a script but my ...

At a palace in Alexandria, early that morning, a man dropped off a basket of figs. “For the Queen,” he commended, with a deep bow, before he left. * * ...

I guess if I were to draw answers from my real life experiance. Her parents tried to contact her later after she spent some time away in the Kingdom of ...