ValerieSong

Thank you for your critique. I will follow your advice to read the dialogue out loud. I will also follow your advice about writing more descriptions of the band members. ...

Thank you that you enjoyed reading my opening installment. I will follow your advice to add more descriptions of the characters and band mates. :)

Thank you for your good review. As well as the good advice and examples on how to describe the appearance of the characters. :)

Thank you that you like my story and for giving A for the grammar. Also, thank you for your advice. :)