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Hello, I'm here to do a review of your short story. On the whole, it's a great story with a very important message, however there are a lot of issues ...

Wow... this is very moving. I like how at the beginning, I had the impression that the narrator was in bed, simply having a restless night, but as things went ...

okay, you've really scared me here... this is really intense... I think that's what you were going for :) I have a few little comments to give you, one being ...

I really don't know if I have much to add on this, it's a very interesting story, the idea is original and I like that we don't get all the ...

This part of the chapter is just as intriguing as the first, I feel like a lot of the confusion about characters is cleared up now, but there are still ...

Hi, this sounds like a good start to a story, I think the relationships between the different races could be interesting and there's clearly something intriguing going on in this ...